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Hello I need a tutor to help me edit this essay. Below are the directions and prompt for the essay. My essay is lacking the parts that explain “Joseph Campbell’s: Hero’s Journey Steps” in each body paragraph. It is urgent this assignment is completed within the 1 hour and I will tip well!

also I’ve attached which steps can be used for each of the three paragraphs and my original thesis

Here are the original directions:

Writing Prompt

Choose one of the assigned readings for class (Beowulf: The Graphic Novel, “Zlateh the Goat,” or “Scheherazade”), and write an academic essay in which you explain Joseph Campbell’s concept of the Hero’s Journey and provide at least three strong examples (including quoted evidence from the chosen text) about how that story reflects (or deviates from) established steps (not stages) of the Hero’s Journey. Aside from the story and sources about the Hero’s Journey provided in Canvas, students are not expected to do additional research for this assignment.

When considering the points to address in the body of the essay, focus on three to four specific steps–not the 3 general stages–of the Hero’s Journey.

Here is a list from the resource Hero’s Journey 101

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The 12 steps of the hero’s journey are…

  1. The Ordinary World
  2. The Call of Adventure
  3. Refusal of the Call
  4. Meeting the Mentor
  5. Crossing the First Threshold
  6. Tests, Allies, Enemies
  7. Approach to the Inmost Cave
  8. The Ordeal
  9. Reward (Seizing the Sword)
  10. The Road Back
  11. Resurrection
  12. Return with the Elixir

Use ONLY sources made available for class–NO outside sources are allowed for this assignment. With that in mind, do NOT quote from the original Beowulf. Quote ONLY from Beowulf: The Graphic Novel.

Additional Notes:

  • Since Advanced Composition is a place to share your individual voice and unique thoughts, I expect you to write an essay of your own original thinking.
  • Include 2 to 3 quoted passages in each body paragraph–at least one from the story and at least one from the sources in the modules about the Hero’s Journey.
  • Write an essay that is 1,000 to 1,500 words.
  • Write about the individual Steps in the Hero’s Journey instead of the broader Stages.

Directions:

  1. Write a 4- to 6-page academic essay in MLA format.
  2. Begin with an introductory paragraph that hooks your reader’s attention, provides background information about the Hero’s Journey and your chosen story, and leads seamlessly into a clearly stated thesis.
  3. Develop body paragraphs by beginning with clear topic sentences and incorporating quoted and detailed evidence from our course materials (use ONLY your chosen story and information provided in Unit 1 about the Hero’s Journey). Quoted evidence should be incorporated thoughtfully and thoroughly into the essay by doing the following:
    • establishing context,
    • introducing the quoted passages,
    • explaining how the passages support the main ideas of the body paragraphs and the essay as a whole, and
    • using proper MLA format to cite the texts.
  4. Conclude your essay with a reflection of the story, the Hero’s Journey, and what we, your readers, can gain or learn from your analysis of the Hero’s Journey.
  5. Include a Works Cited page

Purpose:

We’ll write this essay to practice the skills of academic writing, stating a thesis and clear topic sentences, and supporting them with specific and quoted evidence from our course materials while using MLA format to cite sources.

Student Learning Outcomes

Upon successful completion of this assignment, students will be able to:

  1. Utilize the writing process, including pre-writing, writing, revision and proofreading to produce complex, high-quality work.
  2. Synthesize the ideas of two or more writers to create a broader understanding of an issue or topic.
  3. Utilize critical reading strategies so as to successfully pull meaning from complex texts and texts structured in non-academic formats.

Grading Criteria:

Please select the “more” icon in the upper right hand corner of this page to show the grading rubric for this assignment. If accessing this course by using the Canvas Student App, you will not see the icon. Instead, please use the menu to locate the rubric.

Rubric:

The associated rubric will be used to provide feedback–please be sure to review the rubric before starting AND before submitting your assignment.

Here is my essay:

Zlateh the Goat is a tale story that reveals the friendship between Aaron, a small boy, and a family goat. Aaron was sent on an errand to take Zlateh to a butcher; a journey that took three days. However, a snowstorm forces them off the path, and they seek shelter in a haystack, which furnishes them warmth and nourishment, thus saving both from inevitable death. They comforted each other as they faced the danger of death together. For instance, “for three days Aaron and Zlateh stayed in the hay, Aaron loved her more as she fed him with milk and comforted him with her patience.” The three days became most significant for the two as Aaron became more attached to Zlateh and considered her as a friend that he would rely on and lean at all times. In most cases, some instances happen in our lives, thus defining our destiny in one way or another as seen in the story as the Aaron and Zlateh. The occurrence of events such as change of climate and weather led to the circumstances as it ensured that they stayed together leading to their friendship. Therefore, Zlateh the Goat is a tale of a young hero in the making as he sets off in a quest of a lifetime, furthermore turning out to be different than it was expected as there was no more talk of selling Zlateh as she reunited with the family in a celebratory mood.

In the early setting of Zlateh the Goat, the protagonist, Aaron, is asked by his father to make the ultimate sacrifice for their family. Because it was an unsuccessful year, Reuven the furrier, sought to collect enough money for Hannukkah. One of the most significant options was to sell one of the old family goats to a butcher in town. Aaron left with the goat to complete the deal and was to come back home with money to add up for the family for their upcoming ceremony. According to Reuven the furrier, “She was old and gave little milk. Feivel the butcher had offered eight guldens for her.” This was the best move because they believed that Zlateh had no significant value to the family, thus the eight guldens offered by the butcher was good enough. Sometimes it becomes difficult to know the value of what we have until something happens, then we realize the worthiness. However, the family was devastated to lose Zlateh as they cried and said goodbye. She trusted humans because they have always fed him up but she became worried about the route Aaron took because it was different, but she kept quiet. “Aaron understood what taking the goat to Feivel meant, but he had to obey his father.” Zlateh on the other side had no option but to keep quiet because she had no right to ask questions. This was an ultimate sacrifice for Aaron and the family as well but because it was a bad year it was worth a sacrifice. Sometimes we left without an option, thus we make ultimate sacrifices on what we love most despite how painful and sad it is, but the sacrifice can be justified regarding the situation at hand. However, the sacrifice would lead to bigger things, and seen in the story, the ultimate sacrifice turned to be a celebratory mood at the end as the two managed to escape a major threat together, thus leading to a strong bond between them.

After beginning their journey to the butcher’s town, Aaron and his innocent bargaining chip find themselves in for a disaster. The weather suddenly changed from sunny to a massive snowstorm as Aaron lost his way. “The snow grew thicker, falling to the ground in large whirling flakes.” Aaron realized that he had gone astray, and it was strange snow than ever before and Zlateh became worried about why they were out in such a storm and pleaded to go back home but she would not walk. Aaron became frightened and prayed as well as Zlateh the innocent animal who had so much confidence in humans, but they set her into a trap. It was the most terrifying moment because either of them had never been in such a situation. They came upon a large haystack and though they were saved they were wrong, therefore they needed each other during this time as they showed what it takes to become successful. Working together as a team leads to positive results as well as improved productivity. Aaron and Zlateh worked together to rescue themselves and in the end, they would see light at the end of the tunnel.

Seeing the light at the end of the tunnel was something Aaron and Zlateh thought would ever happen, but with the help of friendship, perseverance, and the importance of their bond they kept going. In the haystack they had to depend on each other to survive, thus creating a strong bond. After eating up his two slices of bread and no other food left, Zlateh gave him milk as a reward for the shelter and food Aaron provided to her. Aaron took zlateh as a sister and talked to her and she responded to with the answer maaa. According to the story, “he always loved Zlateh, but now she was like a sister. He was all alone, cut off from his family, and wanted to talk.” As they returned home on the fourth day, the family was delighted and never considered taking Zlateh to the butcher again.

Weather played an important role in this tale story as it was an obstacle that prevented them from reaching the butcher’s place. The storm allowed them to realize some of the most significant values in life such as friendship, caring, and interdependence as well as loyalty and gratitude. The family enjoyed Hannukkah as planned without selling Zlateh anymore. The three days Aaron and Zlateh spent together changed the story and the way of living of the family as well.

Work Cited

Singer, Isaac Bashevis. Stories For Children. 2004, pp. 45-52.

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