This paper needs significant revisions. Please revise and resubmit the document attached. Teacher made a lot of comments, but here are some general observations:
1. The Problem Statement does not include sources that specifically document your problem, which is obesity among people with IDD due to poor eating habits and a need for behavioral interventions to help them change their eating habits.
2. The Goal Statement section has too many references that really belong in a Problem Statement.
3. You haven’t described an actual intervention. What kind of training do you propose offering? How will it be delivered? To whom? What are you creating?
4. You are using a lot of academic terms that don’t quite make sense. There is no “cohort” in your proposal, for example. There are other places where the language you are using, i.e. “leveraging education and research”, does not make sense. I encourage you to use simple and direct language to describe what you intend to describe.
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